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Dwell Magazine

What do you think this poem I just wrote?

Vote for me if 10.and very poor, poor, ok ok, good or very good for 15 year old girl old to write it? and help me suggest a title for this. suggestions, criticisms ... anything! I want to improve it and to be published in the school magazine. The full moon bars, clubs and all the other girls, disco, party and sprites. One night we had the bitter struggle and ran away, forever. I locked myself in days and nights living in a shadow, I shut the light. angry and occasional flare Oh, how I left and did not even care! You left me in a sad, abandoned and alone, left me crying all night, and I was depressed. Oh, those dark dark days! Now I am away, ready to begin a new life away from you, I leave them all behind me, But the moon is always there to remind me. and I will never forgive you or get you out of my memory, and lived on the dark side of my life, forever.

Not bad. Plenty of room for improvement, but not bad. I rate it 5.9/10 So she came out only during the full moon? What werewolf clan you belong? I do not mean to make fun of his writing, but after you're done with the whole affair, a step back and look at the logic. Be that logic does not seem very artistic, but it would help to reach more people and get a better response from your audience. Here's a suggestion. Go for a CD of My Chemical Romance .. The Black Parade .. if you do not already have. His lyrics are poetry so cool! Keep writing. It takes courage!